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 Post subject: Kiato's Weapons
 Post Posted: Sat Feb 14, 2015 5:34 pm 
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Kiato's Scarf (The Insanity Fragment)
Kiato's scarf could be used as a weapon sharp enough to slice through rock or steel clean like butter.

Kiato's Blades (The Pride Fragment):
Pride became imbuned with Kiato's Insanity fragment and aligned with his scarf giving Kiato vision in all directions also aligned with Kiato's shadows giving his shadow jutsu's a boost in power.

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 Post subject: Re: Kiato's Weapons
 Post Posted: Sun Feb 15, 2015 6:11 pm 
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Hi everything here would check out, with the proper citations and resources. The following statement:

Kiato's Scarf (The Insanity Fragment)
"Kiato's scarf could be used as a weapon sharper than any blade in existence, with the ability to cut fates strings."

Violates both our fresh start clause, and our vaguery clause enumerated here.

Fresh Start Clause: Characters may not have a mastery acceding their rank, of a beginner. They may begin with skills allotted to them at birth and through their story, but should reflect their lack of experience in this new world.

Vagery Clause:Vagary Clause: Descriptions in post, both in character creations and interaction should have sufficient evidence to justify claims and actions from the outside readers perspective.
^Vagary Clause should really drive home the idea that you're not just role playing for yourself, you have to think about an audience and how the idea you're trying to convey is going to be interpreted for people reading threads for the first time or interacting with you for the first time.


Your cloth can damn well cut through anything, but you have reasons backing this up. And since you just started here and your backstory is lacking lots of precedent I dont see how this is possible. So maybe your cloth can cut through hardended steel or rock? is a good start. Leave something to aspire to. Slicing through time seems like an endgame power already.

Your other power is perfectly fine however. So if you could make the adjustments we could get moving.

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 Post subject: Re: Kiato's Weapons
 Post Posted: Sun Feb 15, 2015 6:13 pm 
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You can RP however, just don't go slicing through time and space. If you have any questions or wanna talk about this further let me know!

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